Hello, how are you?
I am writing this because I want to double check if the grammer that you editted is right. It seems there is 'and' in a wrong position on the last sentense. Thank you for your time in advance.

As part of becoming a pharmacist, I have learned valuable skills that are beneficial to my career in pharmacy. At school, I learned fundamental knowledge as well as teamwork. When I volunteered at a hospital pharmacy, I saw the staffs working environment and communicated with other staff. I also worked at a doctors clinic as a representative and learned to communicate with patients, doctors, and pharmacists. In addition, I provided the necessary paperwork via a computer and checked vital signs, drew blood, and gave shots.