There are no citations in this, even when you offer specific numerical facts. There is also no real data or results, just an explanation of the ideas presented. As the only sections are "Introduction" and "Conclusion," I assume the meat of the study is contained elsewhere.<br /><br />I edited for flow and rearranged some wording for clarity's sake. Please let me know if you have any questions or want me to take a second look at anything.<br /><br />Thank you for the opportunity to work with you.