Hi tinat34,<br />Your document is attached with my suggested edits in red using Word's track changes feature. Most of the edits just help the sentence structure and word flow along, as you'll be able to tell. In the second paragraph of No. 1, I wasn't sure what you meant with the "people practice" sentence. I decided to take a stab and throw in a sentence to see if I could guess at your meaning. If I'm wrong, and you don't like my new sentence, let's work together to get your real meaning across. Just shoot me back a message letting me know how you feel and I can try again. I hope you find the rest of my suggestions useful. Thank you very much for choosing me to be your editor. I genuinely appreciate it and hope to hear from you again!