I didn't correct a lot of your language because I think you were going for a distinct voice so I didn't want to change the grammar and thus change your voice.  If you are asking for my honest opinion, I think you need to tone it down a bit and make it more approachable to a wider audience if you want to see any success.  I know I read the copy for women but I a sure it was only slightly difference than the version for me. As a women, if I bought this book, I would be annoyed and offended by how you talk to women (your audience).  I would have one book, for everyone, and change the language to not be so offensive.  Most people will be taken aback when they read 'pussy' in a book like that, I didn't see it coming and most people won't.  
Good luck with it, I wish you the best!
Amy