Good evening,<br />Thanks for choosing me as your editor.<br /><br />I do agree with you that this sentence is confusing. But without some background knowledge on the topic it's rather difficult for me to rephrase it. The topic is obviously not something I'm at all familiar with.<br /><br />With that said, in the document I gave you two possible alternative rewordings of the sentence that I think could clear things up. I can tell you that grammatically, functionally, and syntax-wise they both make sense. As for the science behind it, the meaning changes a bit and that will be up to you!<br /><br />Thanks again,<br />Ryan