Hello Jackson,

Re:  Another great round of editing and advice.  I included all your edits, with exception of two spots:

2nd paragraph, I decided to write: The young girls . . . . . signs reminding us all that Christ died for our sins and our salvation.

5th Paragraph:  I wrote:  . . . . that everyone is going to Hell unless they repentnow.

For me these seemed more readable.  Would you sign of on these or are you adamant about your language for those spots?  

Ill send you The Obituary Writer next, which ended up being a combination of two shorter stories.

My word counts are displayed using Pages software.

Thanks, Dan