Hi there,<br />Thanks so much for selecting me as your editor today.<br /><br />You will find most of my changes are for grammar, effective clarity, tense shifts, and punctuation. I did make a note that I found some of the facts to be quite repetitive, and it seems like a bit of a rehash. I would encourage you to try reading your essay out loud, and when you realize you've said something before it may require a change. This is also a great way to find awkward sentences or small grammatical issues.<br /><br />Overall though, you've clearly done great research and have a firm grasp on this subject.<br /><br />Thanks so much and please keep me in mind for any future editing needs,<br />Ryan