Hello again! After editing this draft, I believe you are on the right track, however I highly suggest altering the topic of the second paragraph. You start out well by explaining your skills in the classroom (though including specific examples of your work - projects, presentations, or otherwise - would greatly strengthen your credibility), but when you begin to speak about your extracurricular activities, you veer away from what the professor truly knows about you. Unless he/she was involved in your extracurricular activities as well, save those details for your personal statement. I've edited this paragraph in case you intend to use it as is, but I do suggest keeping the topic closer to your personal interaction with the professor. Please let me know if you have any questions regarding my edits, and don't forget to rate my service! Thank you.&nbsp;