Hi, Kathleen,<br /><br />I'm so glad you are willing to talk to me! The book really moved me. I was sobbing when Austin died and when he came back to Casey in his confused state. I have to tell you--I am not exactly an unemotional person, but neither am I the type to really losi it while working! I have never before cried that way at the end of a book I was editing. I am glad I'll be getting a chance to go over it again; I can't be sure what I might have missed in the last few chapters! Take your time and feel free to ask any questions you might have. Here are a couple of things you might wonder about:<br /><br />It might seem like I added a lot of commas. THere's one rule of thumb that will clear up some of the comma additions/deletions: When there are two clauses in a sentence, if the second one has a subject, you use a comma to separate the two, regardless of conjunction use (e.g. The mouse wanted the cheese, but he was afraid to pass the cat to get it.) When there's no subject, you don't need a comma (e.g. The mouse wanted the cheese but was afraid to pass the cat to get it).<br /><br />Capping nicknames is another challenge, and I am still on the fence about Sweet Cheeks. I changed many of these throughout Spirit and stopped at some point, because it is personal and unique. With nicknames or endearments, the rule is generally as follows: a capital letter is used if the word refers to a person directly and replaces her name (e.g. I've told Mom before not to get upset) and a lower case letter is used when the reference is general (e.g. Lisa said her mom makes really good cookies). Such endearments and addresses &nbsp;as sweetheart, honey, sir, etc. are used frequently enough that capping them even in direct address seems excessive, although you would if you followed the above rule. I usually leave these lower cased, unless the moniker becomes personal and has meal meaning for the addressee, as I believe is the case for Casey and Sweet Cheeks. This is especially poignant in this case, because it differentiates between Casey and all the other women whom Austin randomly calls sweetheart--it's like a turning point for them when he changes from the derisinve sweetheart to the more personal Sweet Cheeks. Let me know what you think, and I will make them all consistent.<br /><br />I know there's more, but these were off the top of my head!<br /><br />Thanks, Kathleen!<br /><br />