Dear Nilou,<br /><br />I have completed my edits to your document. Congratulations on your work! It was very interesting to read.<br /><br />Let me give you a couple of general suggestions:<br /><br />1. For your tone to sound formal, you want to avoid the use of contractions. For example: write "we will" instead of "we'll".<br /><br />2. To generate more clear sentences, I suggest adopting the use of nouns more than pronouns when appropriate. For example, minimize the use of "it" when starting a sentence as it can create confusion for the reader when trying to identify what "it" is. See here: "It was red." - what was red? But writing "The car was red." makes it clear that we are talking about a car.&nbsp;<br /><br />Please find my edits in your document and some additional comments. Let me know if you have any questions.&nbsp;<br /><br />I hope to work with you again in the future!<br /><br />Thanks,&nbsp;<br />SciEdit<br /><br />PS: If you are not familiar with the use of track changes, please review the following article:<br /><a href="https://support.office.com/en-us/article/Review-accept-reject-and-hide-tracked-changes-8af4088d-365f-4461-a75b-35c4fc7dbabd">https://support.office.com/en-us/article/Review-accept-reject-and-hide-tracked-changes-8af4088d-365f-4461-a75b-35c4fc7dbabd<br /><br /><br /></a>