Hello,<br /><br />As promised, here goes the first half. The good thing about working with you again is that you already know the things that I struggle with: stilted dialogue, the flow of the prose, the use of prepositions, and the use of gerunds vs. infinitives (among other things.) &nbsp;I kindly request that you pay special attention to these things. Thanks. I'll be sending the second half in then days.