Thank you for the chance to review this text.<br /><br />It does read like a translation and so the main problem (at least for me) involved&nbsp;word choices. Many of the sentences were either vague (unclear) or seemed incomplete (unfinished).<br /><br />I have added a lot of comments.<br /><br />I have also added a copy of the text with all changes accepted after the edited text. Might be easier to read this version than the one with all the edits in red.<br /><br /><br />