Hi there,<br />Thanks so much for the opportunity to edit for you.<br /><br />What an interesting, stimulating piece of work you have written. It's very inspiring and beautiful.<br /><br />My edits are mostly related to punctuation and grammar, for ease of readability and clarity. I did add a couple of comments. Your first piece switches tenses from past to present. I'm not sure if that was on purpose (for dramatic effect), but if not it should be edited to remain consistent.<br /><br />Really beatiful stuff... I hope I'll have the opportunity to see more!<br /><br />Thank you,<br />Ryan