I corrected all his major issues. &nbsp;Here is the document with his comments. &nbsp;Some sentences don;t make sense to him or are too long or are in the wrong tence. &nbsp;He always says active, but I bet its because he is a ironman competitor. &nbsp; Just make the highlighed comments smooth and in the present.... &nbsp;think hes getting happy. &nbsp; I sent you the wrong version.... &nbsp;This is the corrected version.... &nbsp;Thank you