Everything is in the same order submitted right now. I'll obviously keep my copy of this so I can make any further updates to it as needed, and then to combine it in the final order at the end.&nbsp;<br /><br />A couple of things: I haven't changed any of the names yet. I wanted you to think a little bit more about who and how you wanted to change them. I did remove all of the mentions of Edward's name, and he is now simply referred to as "the shooter" "the boy" or "the defendant." It's up to you if you want to give him a pseudonym instead.<br /><br />You repeated one part of the story (your phone call to Bryan from work and coming home to find him eating the teenage boy version of Frito chili pie) twice. I removed one portion of the coming home scene, and then concentrated instead on your feeling that he really needed to go to dinner. I think I made it pretty evident through the two passages that you were fighting against a gut feeling.<br /><br />I also reworded a bit of the Back to School chapter. I added some clarfying sentences, and made sure that it was clear your responses were out of stress and concern, not anger.<br /><br />Let me know if you want me to look more closely at something, or change or redo something. I want you to be happy with this.<br /><br />Send me a message when you are ready to upload the next sections. If I go ahead and make myself available, I will inevitably get a bunch of assignments before yours comes in. :) It somehow always happens like that, so I don't want to overwhelm myself and not have the time that yours needs. As soon as I get the message, I'll turn my availability back on, and then back off as soon as it comes in. If you aren't ready with it yet, that's totally fine. &nbsp;