Hi, I thank you in advance for taking the time to edit my personal statement. I have a solid draft that I have written up, but I feel like some of it just does not flow. Theres a few areas I feel like there are run on sentences (For instance the last sentence in the first paragraph). I am hoping for you to give me a objective view of how it sounds, give grammer corrections, and make the words flow better. Im also happy to hear any recomendations if theres anything else you think I should add to make it a stronger personal statement. If theres any information that you think I should give you that would help you in editing, feel free to email me at <a href="mailto:devalmdesai@me.com">devalmdesai@me.com</a>&nbsp;or call me at 732-910-9072.&nbsp;<br /><br />Thank you<br /><br />Deval