Dear EDITWRITE,<br /><br />thank you for proving this service. I would like to refine and make my writing more concise in this scene. This is the scene when the female lead discover that her doctor is actually the man she met in the grocery store that saved her from moving trolleys.<br /><br />I want to know how to make it more alive more emotional (he's telling her she's infertile in the scene) and less long-winded. Please guide me on how to change it and make the english in it better.<br /><br />Thank you.<br /><br />Warmest regards,<br /><br />Ying