Hello shaw,<br />Here is your paper with my suggested edits in red using Word's track changes feature. Just a few issues I noted were:<br /><br />1) &nbsp;In the middle of page 4 you mention "Kuenzel" for the first time. Is that the man who was convicted in the prior paragraph? It is not clear who Kuenzel is.<br /><br />2) &nbsp;The same is true for "Banner" on page 5. This is the first and only time we hear that name so we don't know who Banner is.<br /><br />3) &nbsp;If you are using MLA citation format, I believe you are required to include page numbers with your in-text author cites. They should come after the author's name without a comma before them.<br /><br />I hope you find my suggestions helpful. Of course, I couldn't help but notice that you have done a lot of good work in your life and I wish you luck on this! Thank you very much for choosing me to be your editor.