Did your professor say first person was okay in this essay? And that the essay could be about modern politics rather than literary analysis? If so, this essay should be fine. Otherwise, there needs to be a severe overhaul. I marked where first-person anecdotes (and colloquial phrasings) could be changed, and offered some suggestions, but I did not give notes on how to write a more literary essay because I'm not clear on what the prompt was. I'm not seeing much analysis of the actual text of&nbsp;<em>Animal Farm</em>--the text is rarely cited, and when it is the subsequent analysis is all about American politics in relation to the quote rather than the quote in relation to American politics (hopefully that distinction makes sense...). I'll happily look over a revised version if it turns out the tone and focus need to be changed--the writing&nbsp;is actually quite good, but concerning because it doesn't seem to follow MLA conventions very well.