<p>Random notes<br /> <br /> I always enjoy reading your texts as&nbsp;your&nbsp;conviction and sincerity comes through.</p>
<p>The format is excellent: Big title, quotation, text. It works.</p>
<p>I&rsquo;d like to see a bit more flow, by this I mean you tend to start and stop in sentences (as denoted by the number of commas I deleted). You start, ponder, restart, and re-ponder. In the draft stage, just let go a bit more. You have a lot to say, so say it.</p>
<p>Your messages are so positive as they should be.</p>
<p>Add more personal stories. The best section in this text was the one about the keys, and the second best was the work situation (though you could have been more specific about the details). Everyone loves stories and you have a talent for connecting them to your faith.</p>
<p>I have to end with the editorial grain of salt: ignore all I&rsquo;ve suggested&hellip;or not.</p>