Hi, Alyssa,<br /><br />Thanks for your patience--third and fourth edits go on eht back burner! ;)<br /><br />I made a few more changes and checked over your highlighted text. Some of the things your teacher suggests are things that would be leaning toward unethical for me to address, like actually rewriting sections to create main points and use articles to support them. Still, I made a few suggestions, and I hope these are helpful. It's a big undertaking, and you are doing great--hang in there!<br /><br />Laura