Hello Di,<br />My suggestions are noted in red using Word's track changes features. I think you could add one more line at the end of the first paragraph to give the editor a better idea of the types of students you are looking for. The sentence could give three descriptions of the students you seek. Something like, "We are especially looking for students who have won seven awards, created a new spaceship, or struggled against the odds. Of course, I can't know what the descriptions might be. I just think you should make it easier for him to think of who he might recommend by giving a more in-depth description of who you want. I hope you find my edits helpful. Thank you so much for choosing me as your editor!&nbsp;