Hello, there: May you edited the document in the areas of grammar, sentence structure, flow, punctuation, clarity, consistency, spelling, detail, organization and word choice. Make sure I have a strong thesis statement stating my 3 or 4 body paragraph, and make sure I have transition sentences stating what my next paragraph is going to talk about and I also need topic sentences. Also take the part out where I say the paper is going to talk about or shows and reword it for me
Paper shouldn't be in first person or second person. Only third person the paper should be in avoid the word "I" "we" "our"
Thank
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Also can you make sure that the document followed MLA style as well as your instructor's essay instructions and rubric.

Writing an Essay with Sources Grading Guide
Student: _________________________________		Grade: _______________

Writing an Essay with Sources:
The writer found relevant, reliable, and recent sources that support thesis		10 9 8 7 6 5
The writer provided both in-text citations and a Works Cited entry for each source 	10 9 8 7 6 5
In-text citations and Works Cited entries are documented properly			10 9 8 7 6 5
Basic Elements & Thesis Statement:
The title, introduction, and conclusion are effective  					10 9 8 7 6 5
The thesis statement contains essays controlling idea, subject, and opinion 		10 9 8 7 6 5
The writer found some common ground and anticipated the opposing point of view	10 9 8 7 6 5
Development:
The essays topics adequately develop thesis statement 					10 9 8 7 6 5
Body paragraphs contain specific details that support topic sentences			10 9 8 7 6 5
Unity & Organization:
All paragraphs are relevant to the thesiss controlling idea 				10 9 8 7 6 5
The essay and body paragraphs are organized logically					10 9 8 7 6 5
The writer avoided plagiarism 								Yes	No
   Score: _______________
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