Hello,<br /><br />I am in editing of your editing services for section 3 only.  My chair said that my section 3 is very confusing, and honestly, I really do not know how to approach this and my writing doesn't have that one voice of scholarly tone throughout.  The following are notes from my chair:<br /><br />Statements that do not really mean anything EX: the purpose of the evaluation is to evaluate.  <br />Disconnected sentences - some paragraphs have a series of disconnected statements.  Each paragraph should be focused around the topic sentence.  Too often, you are repeating statements already established.<br />References are not updated with information from the second lit review. <br /><br />Would you need Walden's checklist to follow?  I see that you are a Walden graduate, which is one of the reasons you were my choice of editors. I am two weeks behind as I have searched for editors.   I really hope you can help me fix section 3 so that I can move my paper forward.  Everything you said about your expertise, is everything I need.  Please contact me, if you have any questions for me.<br /><br />Thanks,<br />Wanda Rector 469.279.6234 (cell)