Hi Annheeete1,<br />Your paper is attached with my suggested edits showing in red using Word's track changes feature. It is much easier to read if you go into the Review menu and change the view to "Final" under the tracking option, or if you "accept all changes" in the document.<br /><br />I hope you find my edits helpful. You already had a voice established, but I think moving some parts around helped with the flow. Please let me know if you have any questions about any of the edits. I am here to help. Thank you for choosing me as your editor! I really appreciate it.