Hello again! You've cleaned up a few inconsistencies in this version, but there are still a few plot holes, specifically with regard to Lord de Winter's death. It's just not quite convincing. Especially because Milady becomes able to kill after his death, it should be something that she controls. As of now, he forces it on her as if he wants to die, which doesn't make much sense.&nbsp;<br /><br />I've also done some editing of the dialogue, mostly for better flow.&nbsp;<br /><br />Let me know if you have any questions, and thank you!