Hi, Ivan:<br /><br />Compelling writing. I have a feeling that I'll be thinking about your lines all night.<br /><br />I hope the suggestions are helpful. Editing at this level is always subjective, just a preference, neither right nor wrong.<br /><br />Since your other document isn't due until tomorrow night, I'll put it aside till morning. It's now 10:00 pm (EST), and at this time I usually need a new brain.<br /><br /><br />Best wishes - George<br /><br />I am usually available for editing between 6:00 am and 10:30 pm. If my status is set to unavailable, you can still send a message to me via Editor World.