Hi, Lindsay:<br /><br /><br />I have uploaded your edited document, and I hope that you find the suggestions helpful. If you have any questions, please send a message to me via Editor World.<br /><br />I loved your piece! By golly, you're becoming a good writer.<br /><br />Don't think my edits are in any way a reflection of the quality of your work. I just start editing and keep going, knowing that you can easily accept or&nbsp;reject any of the changes. Keep writing at this level and you won't need me at all. You'll be an editor an Editor World with a gazillion five-stars.<br /><br />Well done!<br /><br />If you have any questions, just send a message to me and I'll get back to you ASAP.<br /><br />My chicken soup wasn't bad -- not the masterpiece I thought, but quite acceptable.<br /><br />Best wishes - George (TypeRighter)<br />I am usually available for editing between 6:00 am and 10:30 pm (EST). If my status says 'unavailable', you can still reach me via Editor World.