Hello Sami,

I am sending the revised ms. to Patti to send to you because it is listed as completed and I can no longer upload it to you.

I have now gone through the ms. several more times. I believe (sincerely hope :) that I have located, reinstated and edited all of the previously deleted material. Patti thought there were several other sections I had deleted, but they were yours. As you know, your deletions are in blue, mine in red. In the future, I would urge you to accept all of your deletions and insertions before sending a ms. out for editing. It will be much easier for the editor to work with a ms. that includes only his or her changes.

Back to this ms. To make it easy for you to find the reinstated/edited sections, I have highlighted them. In one case, I am not sure whether I had deleted one of the poems. I did not highlight it one of the first times around, but have it highlighted now. It may have been in there, however. I have also reinstated/edited various sentences and phrases and have tried to highlight all of those, but have probably missed some. In any case, they are back in as well.

There are a couple of things I need to point out. The second major section on aliens appears to have been deleted, but was not. I simply moved it up to follow the first section on aliens. I have highlighted both where I put it and where I took it out. The program is supposed to indicate sections that have been moved in green, but for some unknown reason, it did not do that. Similarly, I have done the same thing in other places where I had to reformat the first page of a chapter. Moving those bits were the only way I was able to get a chapter to begin at the top of the page. Again, I’ve indicated where they were moved to and from where they were moved.

Although it says 480 pp in the EW console, the ms. you sent me was 474 pp in length. It is now 439 pp. The 35 missing pp are accounted for by the factors I have mentioned before: blank pp between chapters (many, including one I found last night), chapters that began at the bottom of the page (many), two chapters near the end that I combined because the first one was just two pp long, and all of the reformatting I did in combining short paragraphs into longer ones and deleting extra spaces between paragraphs and within poems. Also, although you caught most of them, there were still some places in 13.5 font, bold that I changed. With respect to the two combined chapters, I would suggest that you consider doing the same with some of the other short chapters. Ms. of this length usually contain many fewer chapters, but of course that is entirely up to you.

I now understand the deal with Thomas and TThomasT. TThomasT asked the judge for his alter ego’s job (until Thomas’ personality returned) and the judge consented because he knew that TThomasT was a genius, but—despite the fact that the judge nearly cut off his arm on the basis of TThomasT’s advice—the judge was unaware of the fact that TTT was usually an evil genius. So now all of that makes perfect sense to me.

Finally, because there is a sequel, do you think you should put "To be continued..." or "The End...for Now" rather than "The End"? Again, up to you.

I hope that you will now be completely satisfied with the work I’ve done on the ms. However, if not, please do let me or Patti know and I will continue to work on it. You will not be charged anything more, as the company’s goal, and mine, is always to leave the client totally happy with the product.

Again, thank you for the opportunity to work on your ms.

Best Regards,

Nyanidoc
