Hello, Jinping Wang - Thank you for allowing me to work on your manuscript.&nbsp; Regarding your request that I tighten it up, I'm sorry to say I wasn't able to do that specifically.&nbsp; This is because, looking at the logic of your arguments and the flow of the text, I did not actually see&nbsp;any superfluous or repetitious material.&nbsp; I'm not saying the ms could not be made more succinct (any piece of prose, almost without exception, can be made shorter!), but without obvious repetitions or extended irrelevant&nbsp;content, I (as a non-expert in your field) did not feel competent to start cutting out text.&nbsp; There may have been, rarely, phrases I&nbsp;could possibly&nbsp;have attempted to cut or shorten, but I hesitated to do that, because again&nbsp;overall the text&nbsp;seemed to be well constructed and logical.&nbsp; You might consider revising this chapter into two or more&nbsp;separate chapters.&nbsp; Again this is not something I would attempt to do myself.&nbsp; One possibility would be to have separate chapters dealing with each of the two founders and then another chapter about subsequent emperors.&nbsp; Or&nbsp;you could divide into multiple chapters on the basis of&nbsp;the major topics in the present version -&nbsp;Political Legitimacy, Imperial Governance (a fairly long, though quite logical and coherent section), etc.&nbsp;- so each topic would be its own chapter, and you'd rewrite the introductory&nbsp;section to reflect that.&nbsp; Just a thought.&nbsp; I did pay close attention to sentence structure and word choices and of course typos and grammar issues.&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;I think your English writing is quite good, by the way.&nbsp; I look forward to your comments and questions, and thanks again for the pleasure of reading this interesting work.&nbsp; RebeccaTDE