Hi,&nbsp;Deanna:<br /><br />I have uploaded your edited document and hope that you find the suggestions helpful. If you have any questions, please send a message to me via Editor World.<br /><br />I really look forward to your submissions. You do such a good job that I sometimes wonder if I actually improve the original. On the plus side, for me, I'm learning a lot about the art of the deal. I try to leave the opening dialogue alone since my guess is that it's meant to be a verbatim transcript, even if fictional. The few changes I made were just to&nbsp;aid the reader.<br /><br />Anyway, well done!&nbsp;<br /><br />Best wishes - George<br /><br />I am usually available for editing between 6:00 am and 10:30 pm. If my status is set to unavailable, you can still send a message to me via Editor World.<br /><br />