Hello,<br /><br />Impressive lab work!! Your passion for research in materials science is evident in your statement, and you highlight the strong aspects of your experience perfectly. I made corrections for grammar and word usage, and removed such phrases as "I believe" (the reader knows your statement reflects your beliefs) to reinforce your eligibility for the program. Please feel free to contact me if you have any questions, and best of luck in this important work.<br /><br />Thank you,<br /><br />Laura Kenney