I&nbsp;did this sample edit according to Chicago style, since it looks like a literary sample.&nbsp;I'm American, but I left your British spelling because it was consistent. I also prompted for a few instances where the writing could be made less generic. I also shifted the formatting a little (including deletion of extra spaces and insertion of page breaks where seemed appropriate). I'm always happy to explain my edits, and would be happy to provide more feedback should you decide to hire me for a full editing job.