You’ve got a great title as Jack has to work hard in his personal situation as well as at the traffic stop (imagine if he does run out of gas), so he’s a man at work, no matter where he is (office, home, car). 

Glad you’re not an English major as the best writers write in their own voice, while English majors tend imitate their favorite writers. 

The one space versus two space issue is like a cockroach: kill one, find two more. The initial reason for this spacing dates to when manual typewriters all had the Courier font and the spacing for each letter was the same. Therefore, an extra space was needed after each period to provide a “gapâ€ between sentences that was bigger than the gap between letters. 

Computers have changed this by a function called “kerningâ€ (basically, the computer adjusts the spacing automatically because an “iâ€ is narrower than an “oâ€ or a “wâ€ and so on with fat/thin letters. So the extra space is no longer necessary, yet many still insist on it. The final analysis is to be sure to match any text you submit your target publication’s standards.