Hello! Thank you for sharing this story with me. It is very touching and I'm sure readers will enjoy it.&nbsp;<br /><br />I mostly combined and or/condensed a number of sentences, with the purposes of simplifying. I left a few notes too.<br /><br />My main feedback for you to contemplate -- do you want to make the first part of the piece so much about you and the Today Show and the White House? I'm asking because maybe you could make this more about your brother and what he means to you, and what it meant to receive such a terrific letter from the Obamas.<br /><br />I think it can work as you have it. I tried to shape those sections as a way of saying, "I went through all of this. Here's why - my brother deserves it."<br /><br />I'd be glad to clarify further.<br /><br />Thank you for the nice words about Syracuse - I dearly loved by 4 years there and it is a campus that is forever in my heart.<br /><br />I look forward to working on other projects as well. Thank you!<br /><br />Ben