Hello! <br /><br />For this document, I focused on structure and flow of the dialogue, making sure that the sentences ran together in a smooth, flowing manner while also keeping it grammatically consistent. I also deleted a few phrases, as at times over descriptive sentences caused distraction from the overall meaning of the phrase. I left several comments on the side either explaining certain edits or offering suggestions, so be sure to look out for those. Feel free to message me if you have any questions, and I hope to work with you again soon! Thanks. =)