Thank you for your submission! I've left you plenty of in-line comments, but here is a summary of my edits: I focused on removing passive voice from your paper, as it creates a stronger argument and gives active agency to your research. I did find a few inconsistencies in your conclusions, which you may want to consider revising. Although your research was more holistics rather than minute and data driven, be wary of making sweeping statements on the topic. As you continually state, further research needs to be conducted before any conclusions can be deemed absolute. There were also some aspects of your research that need to be expanded upon for clarity. Please let me know if you have any questions regarding my edits, and don't forget to rate my service. Thank you again! &nbsp;