Hello Helen,<br /><br />The one recurring issue I saw with this excerpt from your manuscript was the use of "students'&nbsp;<em>insert verb</em>" in a way that was distracting and a little clumsy, but not grammatically incorrect in most cases. I am under the impression that it is standard practice when speaking of students in a generic way (or bound within specified parameters) to use phrases like "student academic achievement" or "student participation" to mean "the achievement or participation of the students involved in the class/study/experiment, etc."&nbsp;<br /><br />I hope this makes sense, but if not, feel free to send me a message and I'll try to explain it further.&nbsp;<br /><br />I also left one comment about a study that you referenced, because it seems that the information you included isn't quite enough for the reader to believe that the conclusion is valid. I'm not sure that's relevant to my job, but I thought it might be helpful for you to know that the conclusion appears to be a non sequitur the way it's written. I'm sure it's not, and one or two more sentences would help clarify this.<br /><br />I hope this is helpful to you! Thanks!<br /><br />Best,<br />penpapercoffee