Hi,&nbsp;Jiahui:<br /><br />I have uploaded your edited document and hope that you find the suggestions helpful. If you have any questions, please send a message to me via Editor World.<br /><br />It was a fine personal statement even before the edits. My job was to polish and to highlight your strengths.&nbsp;I wasn't sure where you were an exchange student, so I just put in Germany. You can easily change it if it's incorrect.<br /><br />Other than that, this is a very nice personal statement. I made more changes than were really necessary, but with Tracked Changes you can pick and choose which to keep.&nbsp;<br /><br />MS Word includes tracked changes by default. Before sharing this document, please consider running Document Inspector. To do this, click File/Info/Check For Issues/Inspect Document on the Microsoft Word menu bar.<br /><br />When you open a document that contains tracked changes, the document appears in the Final Showing Markup view to show that the document contains tracked changes. To review the edited document without showing tracked changes, click Review on the Microsoft Word menu bar. Then select Final: Show Markup and click the drop-down arrow. Choose Final. To show tracked changes again, click Final: Show Markup.<br /><br />Good luck with your application! You deserve success!<br /><br />Best wishes -&nbsp;George<br /><br />I am usually available for editing between 6:00 am and 10:30 pm. If my status is set to unavailable, you can still send a message to me via Editor World.<br /><br />