Hello! I've edited your sample, but I did not check your citations against a style sheet. I don't know that any of them approve of using "p." before the page number in an in-text citation, but I didn't know what style sheet you were using so I couldn't double check.<br /><br />I hope the comments in the document are helpful for deciding whether to use me as your editor in the future. If you would, I would appreciate it if you would submit an honest rating of my work.<br /><br />Thanks, and best of luck.<br /><br />-penpapercoffee