Hello<br />I am glad that I could find a great editor!<br /><br />I hope you could modify this diversity essay to sound more natural (more "flowing") as possible.<br />To my opinion, this draft somewhat does not&nbsp;feel very impressive, but I don't know exactly why.<br />Could you please refine this? Please give me any opinions, ideas, or alternative expressions that come to you.<br /><br />Thank you so much. I will deeply appreciate your help.<br /><br />Very sincerely,<br />Hangsan Ahn<br /><br />