kmsolomo -<br /><br />I thought this essay was very well done. It felt evocative of your time in the museum while at the same time effectively presenting your view on the tour and how it related to the concept of the Percy text. It made me want to go to a musem, which is good. Apart from a few word use&nbsp;issues and some restructuring there was very little that needed to be changed mechanically.<br /><br />As for content, I think that you did a good job, but I would suggest including things from the museum that you personally experienced. For example, was there anything about the coral reef or the specimen collections or the gem rooms that you experienced but that was not mentioned in the guided tour? I think that is something that would really put this essay over the top and demonstrate how you're seeing things that the guided experience wasn't pointing out to you. A kind of personal connection would be very helpful considering the subject matter.<br /><br />Thank you for choosing the Word Doctor, please don't forget to rate me if you liked my work. Best of luck with your essay!<br /><br />- TWD