Hi Brandy! Thank you for your request. I do specialize in creative fiction, so I'm happy you chose to sample my editing.<br /><br />You have all of the components of a compelling story here -- I focused on&nbsp;drawing them out by altering the narrative pattern. This includes rearranging, rephrasing, and occasionally adding to the text to really make the imagery pop. Especially in the&nbsp;opening chapter, you should create a distinctive mood to catch the reader's attention.&nbsp;<br /><br />I would love to work with you on this project, so please let me know what you think! If you would like to see more of my work, I recently edited a&nbsp;YA dystopian novel&nbsp;for another&nbsp;self-published author. It's called&nbsp;<em>War of Rain </em>by H.W. Vivian.&nbsp;<br /><br />Thank you!