Hi George,<br /><br />Thanks for your editing. It seems a lot smoother and more coherent!&nbsp;<br /><br />While reading through your corrections, I realized that you thought I was already a physician. I should have let you know that I am writing this essay in order to apply to medical schools. Sorry about the confusion.<br /><br />Also, I think people in science field is very particular about making sentences short. I tried to break down few sentences that seemed to be just fine to me but might provoke those in admissions committees.&nbsp;<br /><br />If possible, would you be able to take a look at the writing once more? I made corrections, and want to make sure the writing is fine for its purpose.<br /><br />Thank you. <br /><br />Viv&nbsp;