<p>You're a good sport and a good writer...when you tell a story and stay on point.&nbsp;<br /> <br /> I hope I didn't come across too harshly, as my goal is always to "score" the best text for you.<br /> <br /> In this text, after the insights into baseball, the meandering began, which, on reflection, has some merit.<br /> <br /> You can&nbsp;now&nbsp;take most of what were essentially one-liners on the final couple of pages and use them as topic sentences for full paragraphs yet to be written.<br /> <br /> All of what you said in those final pages is true, you just need to provide more specific details and examples, otherwise you have a long list of commandments, and I think we can both agree that the first 10 that Moses got are sufficient.</p>
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