Hi George,&nbsp;<br /><br />So I'm customizing my statement of purpose to requirements of each school, and for the one school that requires a longer personal statement, I'm thinking about adding a paragraph about my school activities.<br />
<p>"Moreover, while at university, I joined Club Gero, becoming a vice president, a position I hold currently. By visiting senior communities and assisting them in a regular basis has drawn me to the real-life domestic situation that is largely influenced by politics, such as Medicaid or Medicare services. Even if my activities in the Club Gero does not highly related to the international issues, I firmy noticed that how politics affect actual living conditions. Moreover, as a member of Pi Sigma Alpha, the National Political Science Honor Society, participating in a myriad of discussions how specific political decisions affect both domestic and international living standards by working with international students has significantly influenced my interest in intermational relations. These activities underscored that, untimately, politics is about improving people's lives in the world as a whole."</p>
So, this is the paragraph I outlined for my another SOP. <br />I'm sorry to keep asking you many helps, but would you please review my flows and grammar? I would be deeply grateful for your help.&nbsp;<br /><br />Best,<br />Jaeyoung