Hi, Dominic:<br /><br />I took the liberty of making a few changes&nbsp;to your personal essay, not because it needed it, but because a second opinion&nbsp;never hurts, and I know that you know how to use track changes to keep or reject the parts you like or dislike.<br /><br />You did a fine job, anyway. I just fussed and finessed. Good luck with your application! It sounds like an interesting topic for graduate&nbsp;study. <br /><br />You might have wondered why, in your document, I mention Turner's The Fighting Temeraire. It's my favorite painting, and this September I was in London and saw it at the National Gallery. I hope you get a chance&nbsp;to, too.<br /><br />&nbsp;If you have any questions, please send a message to me via Editor World.<br /><br />Best wishes - George<br />I am usually available for editing between 6:00 am and 10:30 pm (EST). If my status is set to 'unavailable', you can still reach me via Editor World.