Good morning,<br />I really enjoyed reading your story. It's very personal and your connection to your subject is very clear. I can tell this was an important event in your life and your personality shines throughout.<br /><br />Overall I fixed up some grammar and rearranged some sentences for clearer context and tense consistency. I separated a couple of paragraphs for clarity.<br /><br />One of the biggest things I did was turn some of your sort of quotations into actually quotes. I think it would be really effective to add some more quotes into your store - both from you and from Kathy. With these, the reader would be able to feel as if he or she was right there with you in the car, hearing Kathy's screams or your responses. I couldn't help but picture you in that minivan, and adding in what you two were saying would be great.<br /><br />My only other major suggestion would be about the end. There was so much build up, and it was all fascinating and I became invested in your success. And then just - poof! - you passed the test and it was over. I'd love a bit more of a fulfilling conclusion. Tell me about the test, tell me about the moment you found out you passed. And afterwards? Did you get a car? Use the license regularly? Do you ever think of Kathy now?<br /><br />Overall though, great story!<br /><br />Thanks so much for selecting me for your editing. Please consider rating me a 5/5 on Editor World so I can continue to build my repertoire on the site. Let me know if you ever need anything else looked at!<br /><br />Ryan