<p>GENERAL INSTRUCTIONS - I want to remain focused on the "keep searching for blue jays" sign/message from God. I believe the trial transcript portions not only lend credibility and enhance the story but also bring a "true crime" feel and create a "hard to put it down" readability to the book as a whole as well. I would like to make sure the gory details are enough to keep the pages turning but not overshadow the primary message mentioned in the first sentence - "keep searching for blue jays." </p><p> </p><p>After reading KSFB -  I would like people to walk away knowing it is how we react to events that ultimately matter, to allow our intuition to guide us when appropriate and to know that just because we are given a glimpse of the future doesn't mean we are powerless or have to accept it as it is - that we can steer the outcome based on our responses.</p><p> </p><p>I would like grammar, syntax and voice to be consistent throughout. There are some chapters I believe are very good and I would like all of them to be as strong as I feel "John Doe & Chapel Interview" are currently (although there could be improvement on those as well possibly).</p><p> </p><p>Names of all the detectives and police officers will have to be changed to protect them as well as their families.</p><p> </p><p> </p><p>CHAPTER INSIGHTS & INSTRUCTIONS</p><p> </p><p>REVOLUTIONARY REVELATIONS - Very important aspect of the book. Asking God for a sign (blue jays). Fatherly love.</p><p> </p><p>*This chapter has been edited by 3 other editors. I felt it was too long. I am certain your expertise will know if any changes should be made to length or content. W<strong>hat is not here even after all the editing is that my son having been dragged to church nearly every time the doors were opened and seeing all the wars, famine, babies with birth defects, etc. could not bring himself to believe a God could exist and allow such injustices to occur. He was researching Atheism and happened on an account of a Columbine Survivor who played dead in another shooting victim's blood - ultimately, this is what my son did and this allowed him to survive as well. He was looking at this a couple of weeks prior to the shooting.</strong></p><p> </p><p>*I have no problems splitting this into smaller chapters or adding the bold information in and making it a tad longer as the introductory chapter but leave it to your expertise and discretion.</p><p> </p><p>PREMONITIONS: Also very important chapter in that we should not doubt our intuition but I did! </p><p> </p><p>NEAR MISS - You already proofed a portion of this chapter (600 words). This sets up what is going to happen. I am unsure as of yet whether to separate the trial transcript portions and let them be standalone chapters or whether to add them to the end of specific chapters that have trial transcripts that enhance/provide proof or foreshadowing or ad light to what's going on?</p><p> </p><p>If the trial transcript chapters are stand alone - then I believe the beginning of this chapter IS the foreward - exactly as you proofed it and sent it - the beginning several paragraphs that were not trial transcripts would be the foreward (Since you are the expert - I would like to let you make the decision for readability as to whether to split it up and use it as partial foreword and other standalone trial transcript).</p><p> </p><p>*NOTE - the next three chapters were edited by 2 different editors; however, since writing has taken multiple years I don't have the pc any longer with the original files. There is overlap, repetitivity and possible confusion based on 2 of the  chapter names of being so similar.</p><p> </p><p>GUN - I work too much to be able to buy my boys the things I believe will make them happy; many times because of all I didn't have growing up. I felt this was important in raising my children (at this point in the story). The first-person-shooter video games foreshadow what is coming - in a ver big way...</p><p> </p><p>COMING HOME - I am coming home from a shift that I took so a coworker could spend her father's birthday with her. I drop my cell phone - losing all contacts (these will all be restored (and some lost previously) when later in the book family, friends & coworkers try getting in touch to check on Bryan - although I don't recall it being in any of the chapters).</p><p> </p><p>GOING HOME - Simon and I going home from dinner. Bryan has been taken via CareFlite to hospital. Bryan had to be rescusitated in the ER and more than likely in the helicopter as well. I would like there to be an implication in the name of the chapter of Going Home to Heaven. We came home to a crimescene. We had not been contacted by anyone.</p><p> </p><p>JOHN DOE - The hospital listed Bryan as a John Doe for his safety and I don't believe they had time to identify him properly with the dire medical emergencies he had going on after being shot. One bullet is taken from Bryan's body and passed through a chain of evidence, nurse passing evidence refers to my son as John Doe.</p><p> </p><p>*This chapter has been edited and I am pretty happy with it but am sure it needs some minor tweeks.</p><p> </p><p>CRIMESCENE RELEASE - The doctor comes out and says Bryan is out of surgery and in critical condition and will be admitted to ICU with eyes on hi around the clock. The police release our home back to us.</p><p> </p><p>3-1/2 DAYS - Meeting with detectives. Knowing in my heart it wasn't who the police had arrested. Waxing and waning between listening to what the authorities said happened (Jordan didn't make his hockey team, his parents are getting divorced, he will be moving - he snapped and he shot Bryan) and knowing in my heart there was no way possible Jordan would have done that to any of my boys.</p><p> </p><p>KEEP SEARCHING FOR BLUE JAYS (I will submit this chapter in the next few days - some details still need to be written in).</p><p> </p><p>8-DAYS - (will submit in the next few days - not started/completed - may not use information)</p><p> </p><p>CHAPEL INTERVIEW - Awesome piece of the story - how Bryan reacts on camera in perfect love to the person who shot him.</p><p> </p><p>*This has been edited by 2 people. I am sure if there needs to be editing - you will find it.</p><p> </p><p>BACK TO SCHOOL - The rigors and trials Bryan endures once released to go to school. Dealing with teachers, medical issues and truancy court.</p><p> </p><p>FIRST PERSON SHOOTER - BRYAN'S POV NIGHT OF THE SHOOTING - This chapter has been difficult - because of the content.  I will also send it for editing once completed.</p><p> </p><p>TO BE OR NOT TO BE - Competency trial of the shooter. My incognito was more of an investigative nature of what could make an individual randomly ring someone's doorbell and try to gun down an innocent person for no reason. Of importance is meeting Wendy Hundley (Dallas Morning News reporter) and Dana (Cardinals are a sign for her from God & she was a "friend I didn't know I had/tied to Revolutionary Revelations chapter. She was also the Jury foreperson for the competency trial - I met her at the conclusion of this trial)</p><p> </p><p>*I didnt want to bring attention to me while attending this trial. I wanted to observe the shooter and his behavior and not have him act differently had he known that I was Bryan's mom. This doesn't come across the way it was edited and it is another file I don't have the orginal file. </p><p> </p><p>FREEDOM - Shooter is released on bond for 36 hours. I have a gut feeling that something isn't right. Call the jail and find out bond was posted on Friday but time didn't allow for processing him out of jail. The media become strong allies and although initially I was so angry I just wanted to cry, everything worked out perfectly and the community rallied around getting him back behind bars - especially since the Virginia Tech shooting happned and the two perpetrators could have been twins.</p><p> </p><p>BIRDS OF A DIFFERENT FEATHER - Main trial. Dana and Wendy sit with us. Bryan testifies. I may add testimony that corroborates the main trial chapter </p><p> </p><p>WITNESS IMPACT STATEMENTS - This is a trial transcript chapter that is not complete. Will forward it along with the other chapters once complete.</p><p> </p><p>WHY - MAKING SENSE OF IT ALL - This is the last chapter of the book. Several coincidences and insights that everything happens for a reason.</p><p> </p><p>I know this is lengthy but I pray it gives a clear picture of what I am working toward and looking for in the editing process. </p><p> </p><p>Thank you so much! I apologize for taking so many extra days to get this together but felt it important that the bulk go to you as a whole...</p><p> </p><p>Peace, Love & Light,</p><p> </p><p>Barbara Chevalier</p>