Good morning, Erin:<br /><br /><br />I have uploaded your edited document and hope that you find the suggestions helpful. If you have any questions, please send a message to me via Editor World.<br /><br />MS Word includes track changes by default. Before sharing this document, please consider running Document Inspector. To do this, click File/Info/Check For Issues/Inspect Document on the Microsoft Word menu bar.<br /><br />When you open a document that contains track changes, the document appears in the Final Showing Markup view to show that the document contains edits. To review the edited document without markups, click Review on the Microsoft Word menu bar. Then select Final: Show Markup and click the drop-down arrow. Choose Final. To show the document with the edits, click Final: Show Markup.<br /><br />It was hard to choose between your versions&nbsp;-- they were all excellent. I wish all my editing requests were as well written. The best, though, is #1. I focused on it, and I think it has the polished conversational tone you requested. If you would like any further changes, even with layout, just let me know. I'm happy to do that.<br /><br />Don't forget: to turn off track changes&nbsp;to read the edited version. It's a bit messy otherwise. &nbsp;&nbsp;<br /><br /><br />Best wishes - George<br /><br />I am usually available for editing between 6:00 am and 10:30 pm. If my status is set to unavailable, you can still reach me via Editor World.