Hi, Ivan:<br /><br />I agree: there's not much wrong with the text. I made two or three minor changes, nothing significant. I thought, though, from now on, if I were to make any major edits, I'll either put them in a comment or in a re-write underneath. That way, you have the best of both worlds.&nbsp;<br /><br />One other thing. Since a lot of this is dialogue, I think we can take a flexible approach to punctuation. In formal writing, of course, we should use formal punctuation. But with dialogue. it's probably better to use it sparingly&nbsp;and just where it's needed. I hope that makes sense.<br /><br />Best wishes George