Hi there,<br />Thanks for choosing me to edit for you.<br /><br />This is a strong piece of writing, and it shows off your passion, experiences, and background.<br /><br />I would suggest you think of ways to make this REALLY personal. I tell applicants to make sure that the only person who could've written their essay is them - you have such unique insight and background, so be specific and really make them understand you as a person and potential student. Get specific about the town where you observed genetic counselors or what you experienced on your trips.<br /><br />Beyond that, my edits were for grammar, tense shifts, article usage, and general readability.<br /><br />I wish you the best of luck and hope you'll consider me for any future editing needs.<br /><br />Ryan