I will not be able to check my e-mail until this late afternoon or evening.  My request was even you found that the paragraphs (e.g. paragraphs with red fonts) with a few changes, I would rather ask you to make changes to modify it with a tone of vice that you recommend, but it still has the same meaning with natural flow. 
I am trying to write English as a native English speaker for reviewers.  The report will be reviewed by several people before they accept it.  Thank you for your help.