Hi there,<br />Thanks for opportunity to edit for you.<br /><br />You'll find in the document some basic editing, a lot of rearranged sentences for increased clarity and ease of reading. I did add a couple of comments as well.<br /><br />My strongest suggestion would be to read your statement out loud. I encourage you to focus on making this statement very specific to YOU - make sure the points you make stand out as something that only you could write, that wouldn't apply to anyone else, and show off why you're such a strong candidate. Your credentials and passion shine through already, so keep making it your individual star paper to make sure you shine.<br /><br />Please let me know if you have any other questions and I hope to hear from you soon.<br /><br />Thanks,<br />Ryan