Hello, <br /><br />
<p>I was able to cut down to 1019 words. If you don't mind I have a several other questions:<br /><br />1.&nbsp; Is the usage of I over used? Do you think it could be more concise if &ldquo;I&rdquo; was used less?<br /><br />2. Are there any sentences that could be worded differently or combined to be condensed or possibly more concise?<br /><br />3. Are there any words that could be replaced with another that could shorten sentences or make my statements more concise?</p>
<p>4. Am I being repetitive in anyway with words or ideas? &ndash; I feel I may over use &ldquo;I have learned&hellip; or "I discovered&hellip;&rdquo;</p>
<p>5. As a reader do you feel over whelmed with my thoughts or my examples? Or do you feel exhausted in anyway after reading this personal statement?</p>
<p>&nbsp;6. Does this personal statement keep the reader engaged and interested in learning more about me?</p>
<p>&nbsp;7. Are my answers to the questions clearly stated and on topic?</p>
Thank you, <br /><br />Meg