<p>5pecific points of Concern- I had a few issues I wanted to be looked at along with your revision of the paper</p>
<p>Body Paragraph &nbsp;l<br /><br />-eagerly embraced or just embraced?</p>
<p>- Should I insert a sentence on because Jews were few in number &nbsp;and came from a past of oppression that Protestant America did not see them as a threat, ( maybe to show how they were able to build elborate synagouges)</p>
<p>- Are specific church names necessary in the sentence about elaborate designs? I am debating over this since on one hand the professor does want us to be concise and to the point and I feel the same message could be conveyed without those specific names....While on the other hand the use of names does give a degree of specificity and a clear example</p>
<p>Body Paragraph 2</p>
<p>- Should I omit entirely? How do I fit this into the rest of the paper?....Intro and cocnlusion can be modified if need be to include. The book also mentions optimism that after the nation became more settled, more Jewish settlers woudl have the intent of residing permanently</p>
<p>Para 3- Congregation</p>
<p>- parentheses or &nbsp;Offset the word cantor with commas</p>
<p>- Word choice-cultural loss instead of identity loss</p>
<p>Para 4- Education</p>
<p>&nbsp;word choice - debate instead of opposition?<br />Should I rephrase&nbsp;"the other side was depriving Jewish children of a religious education " to "would be &nbsp;depriving"<br /><br />Para5<br /><br />Is legal authority too vague,...if so after reading this paragraph, what would be a better form of word choice?<br /><br />Do i need to edit to make this more accurate to draw out the distinction in the type of divorce that was granted?...Mark Levy did not actually grant a legal divorce,...but rather he gave a preliminary Religious divorce ..leaving it in the hands of the legal system to grant the divorce on legal grounds<br /><br />Maybe religous authority could be a better word choice<br /><br />Para 6 <br />edit as you wish, I don't see any glaring issues but still would like a look at it</p>