<p>This is a very extensive edit and, despite the paraphrasing, plagiarism is still a concern.</p>
<p>The original text was extremely difficult to understand, particularly when citing statistics and percentages.</p>
<p>The References were a complete mess. Also, many of the References are not cited in the main text.</p>
<p>I&rsquo;ve done the best I can and now the author has to review and revise completely.</p>