I forgot to tell you that I purposefully left that super long sentence toward the end of the piece about the adventurous guy to give it a sense of hectic, breathless living and story telling. But I can always revert to the flaws of the original, so I appreciate your corrections and suggestions. I just don't want you to be surprised. And the poem at the end was actually prose, but because he showed it to me on the narrow screen of his phone, I thought that I might give it a more poetic visual feel, but I will revert to simple prosaic text to stick to reality. Thanks.