Hi ChloeKIM,<br />Your document is attached with my suggested edits in red using Word's track changes feature. It's always easier if you get rid of the red by viewing it in "final" view or hitting "accept all changes."&nbsp;<br /><br />You've got a nice, succinct&nbsp;style of writing. I felt it wouldn't hurt to add a few more adjectives to help describe you as successful and capable. I made some suggestions to help with the flow, and I tried to get rid of the "various" because it is used too often. The words you highlighted in red were excellent choices!&nbsp;<br /><br />I hope you find my suggestions helpful. If you have any questions or concerns at all, please don't hesitate to reach out and contact me. Thank you so much for choosing me as your editor. I really appreciate it! Good luck to you!&nbsp;