Good evening Frank,<br />Thank you so much for choosing me to edit your paper.<br /><br />This was a fun story to read. I love your vivid details, and you have a lot of imagery in your story allowing me to picture the situation you describe.<br /><br />I added some similes, personification, metaphors, and a bit of alliteration to your story. I labeled some of them, but may have missed a few. I also made grammar corrections. Many of these were tense shifts (switching from past to present or vice versa) and some disagreements of pronouns or verbs.<br /><br />Things to think about as you finalize your story:<br />1) Are there places you can add even more specific details? What color was the fortuneteller wearing? What did his face look like? What did the store smell like? These small details make it so much more personal.<br />2) Your conclusion feels a bit hurried to me. It's a little anticlimactic. Do you ever still feel like you have a second personality? Did the fortuneteller's conclusion leave you at peace? Do you still have similar dreams, and if so, how do you feel about them now?<br />3) As for a title... Maybe&nbsp;<em>A Priest, A Fortuneteller, and Me</em>. Or&nbsp;<i>Dream or Reality?</i> Or perhaps&nbsp;<em>Me and Another Me</em>.&nbsp;<br /><br />Overall, very well written and fun story! I hope you get a high grade on it.<br /><br />Thanks again for using my services and please keep me in mind if you need anymore editing.<br /><br />Thanks,<br />Ryan