Hi Krisblue,<br /><br />Thanks for choosing me to help edit your report. It is a very interesting and thoughtful topic. I have made some suggestions to improve grammar, word choice, and fluidity. I have also added some thoughts on how to improve your examples and the case of Multi Make.&nbsp;<br /><br />Overall,&nbsp;if there are any parts that you are still struggling with, I would suggest trying to make your sentences simpler. Don't be afraid to use simple words instead of more advanced vocabulary -- especially if it helps you make a point or strengthen your argument.&nbsp;<br /><br />Good luck! And thanks again.&nbsp;<br /><br />