Hi!<br />I edited a bit of Breathless and attached--I understand all your concerns, and I can certainly preserve your voice even if we work in increments every few weeks. Each author is unique, and I would not forget your style.<br /><br />Adverbs are okay when used in moderation, and sometimes you do need to use the past-perfect tense if it is correct. Sometime author advice from online publishers or sites is absolute and doesn't always apply. That's why it's good to have an editor! I can let you know when a "had" is slowing down the story, and when it's necessary.<br /><br />Thanks foy your consideration!<br /><br />Laura