Hi anzai,<br />Your letter is attached with my suggested edits in red using Word's track changes feature. It's easier to read if you change the view to "final" or if you accept all the changes first.<br /><br />I wasn't sure if Mark missed classes because of soccer only in the past, or if that continues today. If it is only in the past, then we should change that paragraph to say this instead:<br />
<p>Mark is an amicable, well-mannered and diligent young man. He is always cheerful and attentive despite a physically and academically demanding schedule. As a key player of USNA&rsquo;s soccer team, he was required to practice after school every day and missed classes to attend soccer tournaments. He displayed a strong work ethic when he caught up on assignments after soccer tournaments.&nbsp;</p>
I added a few suggestions to sort of pump up the enthusiasm about Mark. I hope you find my edits helpful. If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to ask. Thank you so much for choosing me as your editor! I hope to hear from you again!