Since I am not a native speaker, please<br /><br />1. correct the words that can be seen as not natural to the native speakers<br /><br />2. correct the gramatical errors<br /><br />3. correct expressions that is not natural in terms of contexts<br /><br />4. correct expressions that is outdated.<br /><br />Thank you very much!!!<br /><br /><br /><br />