It's me again. I got my paper back with comments, and I have edited everything he said to do. I was hoping you could have one more look at it before I send it back to him tomorrow?<br /><br />In looking can you focus on Table 1 indepth interviews. His comment was "Make changes as needed to read better and have it more itemized." I took the information and put it in a table and used point form. Can you have a look at it and see what you think? (I also couldn't figure out how to use points without pushing everything over.) Or do you think I should write it out like a paragraph?<br /><br />This was his email, <br /><em>Spent the last few hours working on your draft. Given the time constraints, I took the liberty of making changes myself.</em><br /><em>I also found you didn&rsquo;t address some of my comments from previous drafts. I needed to act. Otherwise, your graduation would be in question. </em><br /> <br /><em>The changes made by the editor certainly helped, from a grammar and language perspective. It was a good decision. However, there were major issues with structure and formatting. At this stage I wouldn&rsquo;t expect sloppy work. The main problem was the lack of consistency. For example, your table of content was full of mistakes. Your headings were not consistent, your graphs all looked different, etc. Moreover, the interviews sections was not written well and didn&rsquo;t communicate well (again). I created a table and inserted your information in it. Please go over it and make changes as needed.</em><br /> <br /><em>You will find all my changes tracked. Please go through every single one of my comments and changes and &ldquo;accept&rdquo; them.</em><br /> <br /><em>One other issue that you must address: Do NOT refer to yourself. Do not say &ldquo;I found this interesting&rdquo; or &ldquo;I conducted surveys&rdquo;. Say things like &ldquo;this was an interesting find&rdquo; or &ldquo;surveys were conducted &hellip;.&rdquo;. I made some changes but I want you to comb through the paper again make sure there are no other cases.</em><br /> <br /><em>Make all the extra changes and send me your work one more time. I will go over it again. If I feel it is OK, I will send it to Susan.</em><br /> <br /><em>Take your time. I will not get back to it today. Just do a thorough job and pay attention to the details. Send it to me tomorrow.</em> <br /><br />Any help would be great Laura,<br />Thank you,<br />Greg