This is a very well written paper. &nbsp;Although it has lots of editing marks, I enjoyed reading it, and many of the comments and questions are my thoughts as I read it. &nbsp;The only thing that confused me was that so many sentence began with "A study said..." and it was hard to keep track of which one you meant. &nbsp;It would be better to say something like "According to a study by X (date)..." so that the reader can keep all of your sources straight. &nbsp;The citation at the end of the sentence, although required, doesn't get the same attention as the sentence itself. &nbsp;I also changed "mentioned" to words with similar meanings. &nbsp;I hope that these changes ll make sense to you. &nbsp;I might be away from the computer for a while today -- one of my nephews is home from college and I want to spend some time with him before he disappears (with my car) for the rest of the week.<br />Thanks again,<br />Clarity