Hi njwjudy,<br />Your edited document is attached with my suggested edits in red using Word's track changes feature. It's always easier if you view the document in the "final" view, or "accept all changes" in order to read it without all the red.<br /><br />You are a great writer. Again, I'm surprised English isn't your first language. The words you highlighted in red were excellent choices. Most of my suggestions are self-explanatory and they just help reduce word count and help with the flow. I added notes in highlighted yellow just to let you know a few things as I went along.<br /><br />I hope you find my edits helpful! Thank you so much for choosing me as your editor. I really appreciate it. Please feel free to ask me anything about any of my changes or get in touch with me about any questions you have. Good luck to you!&nbsp;