Dear Laura,
Thank you very much for your terrific editing and paying attention to details. Regarding the synopsis, I agree with you that its too detailed and long. Will you please edit it down by chopping at it? And check for inconsistencies? If it takes additional fee, I am willing to pay for it. Thanks again.

P.S. For your reference, I attached your memo as follows:

I will check for inconsistencies, but I believe the synopsis is far too detailed and long. If you would like me to edit it down, please let me know. I dont want to start chopping at it without your permission. Thank you.