How are you doing, sir?<br />This my academic SOP, which really is in need of your help.<br /><br />I tried to express that I had specific experiences that gave me my research interests.<br />I spent hours after hours, but some expressions were just too complex for me to straighten up,<br />and I need somebody who could coach me overall.<br /><br /><strong>1. First of all, I really wish you could make it more succinct. Could you please make it&nbsp;</strong><br /><strong> &nbsp; &nbsp;brief. This is my greatest concern.</strong><br /><br /><strong>2. Second, I hope you please could make it sound more professional and clear as can be.</strong><br /><br />Thank you so much, sir!<br /><br />Very sincerely,<br />Hangsan Ahn