Hi Laura,<br /><br />&nbsp; &nbsp;Thank you for the sample edit. I like the feedback and am interested in the past tense changes. I have always written in a first person, somewhat present progressive tense, and my writing has a journalistic quality to it. Having been a big Kerouac fan I think this has influenced me as well. Most of my document is written that way but I can work with those changes.&nbsp;<br />&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;I am working on getting this submission ready for MFA program applications. Mostly want it to be polished and to not have any major problems with mechanics and grammar. I was looking for the 5 day turnaround and am going to submit about 30 pages if you are available. Thank you.<br /><br />Robert<br /><br /><br />