Long time no edit! I do aplogize for the absence, but I'm back and ready to continue working on my novel. I've reviewed your notes and implemented &nbsp;most of the changes. The only question I have is in reference to the passage regarding Damon's Halloween fort. &nbsp;I get what you mean about it being a time jump since it is a flashback, but I'm concerned that readers may be confused when they see the offset paragraph and then it suddenly jumps back to Lela cooking in the kitchen...? &nbsp;Does the same rule apply?&nbsp;<br /><br />p.s. I accidentally posted this note in your reviews sections...( ' ') the rating was genuine, but i didn't realize it would be open to the public