This looks good. So, you aren't supposed to have a thesis, right? It's a bit like a book report: an article report. If that's the case, I think this looks good. There are some points at which I made comments suggesting more details. Also, the final paragraph has some text that's cut and pasted from the opening paragraph. I'd think of a new way to close it.&nbsp;<br /><br />You should probably mention at the beginning that this is a summary/report on the article you're reading.<br /><br />Let me know if you have any questions or concerns.<br /><br />Oren