Hello,<br /><br />The essay I have uploaded is an essay for a Master's in Public Health Program.  When reading the essay it may seem as if the first paragraph sounds like a transition paragraph rather than an introductory paragraph. I have only included the last 2 paragraphs of the essay. The rest of the essay has been edited.  Please make any changes you consider necessary.  I am also having a difficult time finding a better transiton for the second paragraph if you have any ideas on this please include them.  I have had a few documents edited by you and I am always happy with your work.  Awhile back you edited a medical school essay for me and I got accepted into the school!!! Thank you for all of your help.  It is greatly appreciated. 