I have just sent it back to you with a few minor changes in the first part. It really read alright, which is why I didn't do anything to it the first time around--I rather thought that you had cut and pasted comments from someone else to which you then responded.

One other thing: rather than saying, 'Review of a paper,' say, 'Review of [paper title] by [paper authors]' and give the date.

Best Regards,

Nyanidoc