<p>Hi Laura,</p>
<p>Thanks for your help on Captain Quirk. I forgot to change the footer (an earlier title). Couple things: I kept the word &ldquo;slow&rdquo; because, to me, it provides a better visual..like time was creeping, sneaking out the door. I had the impression of seeing little bits of time (like those M&amp;M guys sneaking out the window). The &ldquo;two-wheeled transport&rdquo; didn&rsquo;t see to fit with the flow of the sentence. Seemed too descriptive for bike (two-wheeler?). RE: page 6 re the judge: &ldquo;Overwith&rdquo; ?? Was that a typo or intended (like connecting the words<i> over</i> and <i>with</i> so that they are read and said together, faster., like speeding up the case.</p>
<p>My next piece titled: &ldquo;The Morning-After Card&rdquo; takes place during Angie&rsquo;s road trip to Cleveland, with flashbacks (e.g.,) Jimmy&rsquo;s manager and <i>protector</i>, Neal (a lawyer) went to visit Angie the morning after the Scranton concert. Should be done in a day or two. That piece will put us over the 40K word mark&hellip;half way to 80k (novel length).&nbsp;</p>
<p>After the next piece, I would like to talk about plans/process for putting all this together and how we do this. For example, I have some stuff that I&rsquo;ve written that could be incorporated into the overall piece, but not sure if some of it fits, or where parts of it could go. There's also some already edited pieces that I would like to go back to better shape the story and link things together into a flow. My thinking, is that that stuff needs to be read first, and if determined to be workable, then it gets edited. It&rsquo;s like content analysis vs editing text. Since this whole writing and editing process is new to me, I&rsquo;m not sure if that type of work is part of the Editor World business model.&nbsp; Am I making any sense?</p>
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<p>Thanks,</p>
<p>Dan</p>