Hello,<br /><br />Thank you for the opportunity to read and edit your two chapters. I have also gone through the references once, as there was no way to determine how much repeated information I read. I gave the appendices only a cursory look.<br /><br />Please, I beg you, <em>do not</em> <em>take any of the following personally</em>, as I have edited many theses and dissertations like yours and found them universally frustrating. You simply must not, and to be amusing, I repeat, must not, repeat yourself. To take just one of many examples, you state your research questions and hypotheses in Chapter 1, as is appropriate (null hypotheses do not need to be stated; see my note at the top of the Table). However, you present them in the text and in a table. They should be stated only once, preferably in the table, but definitely not in both. Thereafter, they should not appear, as they do again in Chapter 3. They have nothing to do with the methods and do not belong there. I have deleted them. I have also deleted wholesale any other sections I could identify that were repeated, and tried to make sure that they appeared only where they should. I may have missed some, as there were so many that after awhile, I admit that I became quite befuddled.<br /><br />One other note for future reference: In the titles of journal articles, only the first word is capitalized, while in the titles of the journals themselves, all major words are capitalized. I have corrected all of these and indicated as well where there is missing information, such as vol and/or pp numbers, etc.<br /><br />If you could take a moment to rate my work, I would appreciate it very much. <br /><br />All Best Regards,<br /><br />Nyanidoc