Hello,<br /><br />As you will see in my comment on your doc, your writing needs very little editing. However, if you are interested in changing the tone from professional and academic to one that's more accessible to your audience, I can help you with that. Couplr of questions: would you leave citations within text? Can you remove references to the fact that this is a research paper, or do you want to leave those in? Are their anecdotes further on in the paper that make it relatable?<br /><br />Let me know what you think.<br /><br />Thank you,<br /><br />Laura Kenney