Dear Sir/Madam,<br /><br />This is my Personal Statement for master degree of economics&nbsp;application. It's very important for me and i hope you could give me some advice besides revise. I would really appreciate for your help and advice. &nbsp;And i want to know your opinions about my second paragraph. Do you think it's necessary or should i delete it? &nbsp;And what do you think of the structure?&nbsp;<br /><br />Thank you for your help!!!<br /><br />Best wishes,<br /><br />Jiahui Wang