This is a draft of my personal statement for residency application. The first paragraph is a personal experience to draw immediate attention from the readers. Then the next few paragraphs, each has its own theme, are designed to showcase attributes of mine that will make me a strong candidate for a pediatric residency program. Towards the end of the personal statement I'm tying it back to the first paragraph, while having its own theme. I also try to have smooth transition from paragraph to paragraph and a strong conclusion. Still, this is an early draft and it feels weak and not accomplishing what I'm trying to convey. Would you please take a look and let me know what you think?<br /><br />Many thanks!<br />Andy