Hi Laura,
Thanks again for your comments and edits.  Ill send back the revised version as you suggested.  Im curious how you made the Oswego connection.  The city website had a Famous Oswegonian section and Jerry Seinfeld was on the list (he attended SUNY Oswego).  Over the years, Ive had fun with his listing, suggesting that any famous person who drives through the city and is spotted should be put on the list.  The golf tee inventor was also on the website list.  I think he was a dentist.  Unfortunately, the website has been revised and the Famous Oswegonian section is no longer there. The new website should get the Lewis and Clark Award for being the most challenging website to navigate (Ill use that line in a story sometime). The pro golfer and olympic skater (by other names) did have signs.  The City with a Future slogan was stolen from neighboring Fulton, New York, which no longer has that slogan and its future is questionable.  Yes, there is a bagel shop with a rattling air conditionerand yes, there are cab drivers who smoke in their cabs while waiting for a call. The first time I saw a cabbie smoking prompted "So Not San Diego," even though I've never been there.  I have a couple other stories centered in Zenna Falls that have been through the editing process: One, titled: Thats a Wrap, is about a high-school kid who works part-time in a local drug store.  He pretends the customers are in a movie he is producing; the other is about a group of Evangelical-type folks who converge downtown to spread the Good News and Warnings, and events unfold from there. Its called The Corners.  All of which have been great fun to write.    

On an editing note, I seem to get in trouble when it comes to using proper tense.  I tend to write as if Im having a conversation with someone and speaking in present terms.  Like, He always opens the door slowly, instead of He always opened the door slowly.  To me, Im making a comment or an observation about the guy. The past tense makes it seem as if he is no longer around, or he no longer opens doors.  Inserting the words had and that seems, in some spots, to slow down the conversation and makes it more formal.  Staying on the past tense lane is a difficult road to follow.
Thanks,
Dan