Hello JCM,<br />Your document is attached with my suggested edits in red using Word's track changes feature. Of course, it's much easier to view the document in "final" form or to "accept all changes" first to get rid of all the red lines.<br /><br />This was a beautifully written piece. I hope I have done well bring out the flow of the story. Please feel free to message me back if you have any questions or would like additional work. Thank you so much for choosing me as your editor. I appreciate it very much and really enjoyed working on this! I hope you have a wonderful week ahead.