ifytou don't mind, could you also check this sentence?<br /><br />"My academic goal is to reveal how governmental, kinship intervention on resocialization of the elderly affects biocultural construction of aging in China."&nbsp;<br /><br />I changeed the very first sentence.&nbsp;<br />Anyway, I'm appreciate your great work.&nbsp;<br /><br />I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon.<br /><br />Sincerely yours,&nbsp;