Thank you for your submission! You have the building blocks of a great paper here, but I did notice many sections that needed more explanation and clarification. Make sure that the first paragraph clearly introduces the topic of your paper. I wasn't quite sure what you were analyzing at first, but after reading the rest I went back and pieced together a thesis for you to work off of. Try to focus on the screenwriter and director's techniques and how successful they were as opposed to the emotion of the movie, as that is subjective.&nbsp;<br /><br />Please let me know if you have any questions about my edits, and be sure to read my in-text comments.&nbsp;<br /><br />