Hey there Jaeyoung, <br /><br />For your first question, perhaps "Indeed, the readings for such courses was a panacea", just to make sure that the thoughts connect. <br /><br />For your second question, that paragraph should probably focus a bit more on how your active participation in clubs and courses affected your homesickness, as that's what the prompt is asking for--you don't want the committee to think you're straying too far off topic. If you delete the sentence in question, that might give you more room to put some explanation of how your growing awareness of the world eased that homesick feeling. <br /><br />Hope this helps! <br />EE