Hi Maya:<br /><br />Here are both documents.<br /><br />I incorporated the paragraph you sent&nbsp;but moved it back one paragraph&nbsp;from the end. I think it reads better that way.<br /><br />For about a page, the second essay is still a bit vague three-quarters of the way through. I wish I could make it clearer, but I'm just not that familiar with the subject. Maybe you can tighten it a little.<br /><br />I think you did a great job, though, with a difficult subject.<br /><br />Please proofread carefully.<br /><br />Well, I think I'll close down for the night. I'm sure your brain, like mine, is overheating.<br /><br />I hope my suggestions help.<br /><br />So I'll say goodnight and I hope to hear from you soon.<br /><br />Best wishes - (a tired) George<br /><br /><br /><br /><br />