Hi, Brandy,<br /><br />Here is the first edit :)&nbsp;<br /><br />I have the notes from your emails at the top of the doc; I have read them and considered your questions and need to digest everything for a few days before addressing them. I think the judges have some points, but I'm confused as to why they were confused with point of view. I want to revisit after a few days and read the action scene you refer to and see if there's enough division in personality and voice for your girls. It can get confusing, given that they all have S names and are similar in age and spunkiness, but I think they are distinguishable. There might be several things to do to really draw their characters more finely.<br /><br />Take a look at the edits and make notes of any questions you might have. I addressed your semicolon etc. question in one of my comments. In the meantime I will consider the judge and notes questions. I'll plan to get back to you right after Christmas.<br /><br />I wish you and your family the mosed blessed of holidays and I will talk to you soon.<br /><br />Love (I feel like I can say this after being so involved in your emotive books! Don't be offended if I am to personal!),<br />Laura