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<li>Please pay special attention to</li>
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<li>tense shifts - what is the proper tense for a&nbsp;press release&nbsp;like this?</li>
<li>Quotes and Punctuation</li>
<li>Commas -- improper use throughout (I think</li>
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<li>First paragraph - is family-friendly mentioned too many times? An Alternative? Idea is that wives and kids are comfortable on a dry boat that is not likely to flip over and scare people...and stable sailing most of the time.</li>
<li>CEO, Jay, doesn&rsquo;t like the word Revolutionary in the last sentence. Some options for revolutionary below, but we never agreed on one. If you can think of a better way to say it, please. He doesnt want it to sound trite, trendy, or too overconfident. But I need it to be the big punchline!</li>
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<li>ground breaking</li>
<li>a new era</li>
<li>breakthrough</li>
<li>ground-breaking</li>
<li>refreshing</li>
<li>paradigm shift</li>
<li>course correction for the sport</li>
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