Good morning, George. It looks like it might rain on and off all &nbsp;day so I'll try to spend the whole day just writing. In this one, I was going to use only half of the story (the second version) but I don't think it's 100% clear that they are sisters, so I added a prelude. Still, I would love for you to take out any segment that you think is unnecessary ("she's always been my baby", "when I was eight" (or "I thought I was the other mom) although I think they probably all have a place (without "I thought I was the other mom" the reader may perceive that the older sister was replacing a missing or inadequate mom.<br /><br />I added "I was stunned" myself because the older sister actually said, 'I was like..." which implies being speechless and stunned, I think. :)&nbsp;<br /><br />Thank you so much!