Hey Vance,
I've finished looking over your paper, and I think I've made all the edits I can make at this point. I'm a little concerned with your pro-colonist bias being so apparent, and with the general lack of "so what" argument going on in your paper. 
On a more concrete level, I'm also concerned about the lack of proper citation in your paper. I've noted where citations need to be added, but I cannot add them for you as I do not have access to your sources. (On that note, the hyperlinks you provide seem to be incorrect...not that I would do your research for you and find the page numbers/correct quotations you seem to be missing.)
I'm sorry if this seems harsh, but I don't think I could do future edits for you if this is the level of revision they tend to require. I will happily upload the edits for this paper, but I wanted to forewarn you that there is more work to be done than I can in good conscious provide for you.
Best wishes,
Tori