I'd like to see what you're able to do with my writing. :) This is an excerpt from the middle of my debut book, Fragile, and I'd really appreciate if you would scour through it and look for any grammatical errors. I would also appreciate if you would offer professional advice on how to make the scene less cliche and to make it stand out.<br /><br />**The book's still in revision, and it'll be a while longer before I pursue hiring an editor, but my future decision will be affected by the work i see here**<br /><br />Thank you,<br /><br />Cody Ryan Haag