I've looked at basic language, grammar, and syntax, as well as the overall focus and the transitions between thoughts. I queried some of the vague wordings that were detracting from focus/clarity, but for the most part I made edits based on the context of the sentence and added notes that explained my edits and let you know potential alternate phrasings. Please let me know if I have misinterpreted your meaning anywhere, and I will be happy to re-edit that section free of charge.<br /><br />A couple overarching comments:<br />Your comma usage is not always consistent (the comma before the final item in a list is sometimes missing).<br />Sometimes you refer to people using "that" instead of "who;" the word "that" should only be used in reference to objects.<br />There is a lot of unnecessary hyphenation; terms should only be hyphenated when the words are intended to be read as one word rather than words with independent meanings, and even then hyphenation should be avoided if the unhyphenated meaning is unambiguous.<br />US and U.S. were both used (I went with changing all instances to "US" for consistency's sake).<br />First uses of abbreviations should be spelled out, then all subsequent uses should use the abbreviation (unless it comes at the beginning of a sentence, in which case either re-phrase or spell out).<br />Sometimes terms were abbreviated before their abbreviations had been explained, so I either had to move an explanation from later in the text to an earlier point or insert an explanation where none existed.<br /><br />I didn't see any glaring weaknesses in the content, but there are definitely sections where your meaning could be clearer (which, as I mentioned earlier, I tried to help you with by letting you know my interpretations). Please let me know if you have questions or concerns, or would like for me to take another look at any part of this free of charge.<br /><br />I will not be available for most of Friday, so if you have any urgent editing needs please let me know as soon as possible so you can get the five-star editing service you deserve.<br /><br />Best wishes!