Hi, Samantha:<br /><br />Here it is. I hope you find the edits helpful. I had to cut just a little but added some thoughts of my own. Please proofread carefully, to ensure that my ideas agree with yours.<br /><br />Best wishes - George<br />I am usually available for editing between 6:00 am and 10:30 pm (EST). If my status is set to 'unavailable', you can still reach me via Editor World.<br /><br />