I've edited for grammar and clarity, as well as doing a read-through for compliance to the rubric you sent. I've made suggestions on things to cut and things to expand, as well as some general queries when I wasn't sure whether I was interpreting your meaning. Based on my understanding of what you wrote, I believe it should comply with the rubric's specifications (provided you make the necessary edits, since some of your sections are too long). I'd be happy to provide additional guidance if you feel that my edits at this point are not 5-star-worthy. Please let me know if you have follow-up questions.<br /><br />Best,<br />Tori