<p>Hi there,<br />Thanks again for choosing me as your editor.<br /><br />I am still so intrigued by your project, and it sounds like such a wonderful idea. I know I say that every time, but you continue to impress me.<br /><br />Some notes:</p>
<p>*Formatting seems a bit inconsistent: Sometimes you're indenting paragraphs in sections, and sometimes you're not. Maybe that's purposeful, but be sure to stay consistent.<br />*Understandably, aspects of your planning process are a bit vague - particularly in regards to the board members and their expectations and connections. If you can add any more specific details, I think it would be helpful. You go on to list the names of the board members, but it might be good to give some specific details as to their experience or background.<br />*It's helpful to start sentences with the subject, or important 'meat' of the sentence. I rearranged a few to get rid of this passive voice.<br /><br />Best of luck! I hope to read more of work soon!<br /><br />Thanks,<br />Ryan</p>