Hi, Peter:<br /><br /><br />Please&nbsp;find attached your edited document and hope that you find the suggestions helpful. If you have any questions, please send a message to me via Editor World.<br /><br />Although I'm comfortable&nbsp;with the philosophical language, I focused&nbsp;on flow and polishing. In fact, with an introduction and conclusion, you should have&nbsp;a fine paper.&nbsp;<br />You did the heavy lifting, which made my job easier. Even&nbsp;so, I envy you working at your level in philosophy.<br /><br />Please proofread your edited document carefully. I'm married, so I know I sometimes make mistakes.<br /><br />A word about tracked changes:<br /><br />When you open a document containing track changes, the document appears in the Final Show Markup view to show the edited document. I've included instructions to hide the red markup. It makes reading&nbsp;much easier.<br /><br />I have made more edits to your document than were strictly necessary, believing that it is better to over than under edit. With Microsoft Word&rsquo;s Track Changes, you can of course easily keep or reject any or all of the edits.<br /><br />Best wishes - George (TypeRighter)<br /><br />I am usually available for editing between 6:00 am and 10:30 pm (EST). If my status says 'unavailable', you can still reach me via Editor World.<br /><br />In a separate&nbsp;message, I'll send a list of J. Burbidge's publications. They're in MLA format, which might help with your bibliography.<br /><br /><br /><br />