Hello again:<br /><br />I think this will be more to your liking. I don't blame you for wanting your own voice. In fact, I commend it!&nbsp;<br /><br />Although I've made a few changes (it was much easier this time since I now undertand your aim), they are mostly cosmetic: just minor corrections of grammar, vocabulary, spelling and syntax.<br /><br />By using track changes, you can accept or reject any or all.<br /><br />If you like any of the suggestions from the previous version, you can of course copy and paste.<br /><br />Once again, good luck with your application. I wish you success!<br /><br />Best wishes, TypeRighter&nbsp;<br /><br />