Dear Nyanidoc,<br /><br />I've done a lot of rewriting since last time I had you edit for me. This is close to the final draft. One question I have, as you will see in the document, is what verb tense to use to describe an event in the past.<br /><br />Other than that, please check my grammar, spellings, and transition and flow. Especially the first paragraph, please check the flow of the first paragraph and flow from sentence to sentence.&nbsp;<br /><br />Thank you very much for all of your help!<br />Andy