Hi, Viv:<br /><br />I think we're getting there. In fact, I<em> really</em> think it's coming along.<br /><br />Although I'm not exactly&nbsp;sure what the question is, I assume it's along the&nbsp;lines of why I want to be a physician. So, I agree, you don't want to just list things. My memory isn't what it used to be but I thought there might have been parts of the previous version worth using. But never mind. This one is better. It's still&nbsp;about two hundred words short, but we can fix that. What I'm aiming for is <span style="background-color: rgb(255, 217, 222);">a</span> sense of poetry and passion in your&nbsp;personal statement. We should avoid too many references to how we love people etc, because medical schools receive these blandishments all the time.&nbsp;<br /><br />Your idea of beginning with singing is brilliant,&nbsp;and a great hook! It allows us to develop a metaphor with singing at its heart.<br /><br />But we need a bit more. I might be able to flesh out what we have without adding any new ideas. I really would advise against any further references to helping people. In medicine, that goes without saying.<br /><br />So, we should treat this as a work&nbsp;in progress. Just send a message to me with your thoughts and if you wish with an attached document. There's no charge, and I'll get back to you as soon as I can.<br /><br />Best wishes - George<br /><br /><br /><br /><br />