Hi Laura,
Thanks for your edits and comments on Caught Off Guard. As always, very helpful and appreciated. Couple things: I tried to write the story that made the reader conncect the dots that Gwendolyn was Jerrys sister, and that she and Jay were in the midst of forming a relationship. Did you make the connection, or did I leave clues that were too loose (e.g. Iowa connection...referencing Jerry's sister and Jay)? Also, You referred to Frank as "hilarious...a peice of work."  I tried to portray Frank as being angry and bitter, who used sarcasm as his outlet. He turned into becoming a very bitter person...all because of the loss of his son. I wasn't sure about your use of the word "hilarious." Yes, he has some funny lines, but is the bitterness still evident? Also, the other short story youre suggesting Is it about Gwendolyn? 
Thanks,
Dan