The grammar and sentence structure are mostly fine, but my main critique is that you don't give enough specific information about the things you state as your reason for writing the supplemental essay&nbsp;at the beginning of the essay (namely, the extension of your studies and the lack of professional experience). I noted this in the document itself, providing some basic prompts to help you focus on the particular information you're missing, but if you have further questions or concerns about my edits please let me know in a message.