Hello, Ginger Mckay - Thanks for the opportunity to work on your interesting manuscript.&nbsp; Per your instructions, I have proofed and lightly edited, and checked conformity to APA style.&nbsp; With regard to the latter, I had some concerns around section headings and hierarchies, as you'll see in a couple of&nbsp;my comments.&nbsp; I'd suggest you consider the overall structure of the manuscript and be sure that the structure logically conforms to the way you want to present information.&nbsp; I'll be glad to answer any questions.&nbsp; TDE