Hello, sir!<br />This is an urgent one. Please help me.<br /><br />1. For the number 1, YOU CAN CUT AWAY AS MUCH AS YOU CAN 1. All I need is brevity.<br />2. For&nbsp;the number 2 should explain why my GPA was terribly low. I was going to be a guitarist. This should explain that.<br />3. For the number 3, the original writing felt too bold or "against the US" which I never meant. Please make it sound more gentle, but still clear<br /><br />Thank you very very much!