Hello again! <br /><br />As with before, I focused on consistency with terminology and phrasing, as well as grammar and structure to fit APA style (although I left out the header, as you mentioned in your comment). Also like last time, I left a few comments and suggestions on the side throughout the piece for you to consider, so be sure to check those out! Feel free to message me if you have any questions, and please don't forget to rate my service! Thanks. =)