Thank you for the revisions. You're almost there, you just need to clarify a few points. In the "true love" section, the examples you provide show that the screenwriter chose to change certain plot points in order to create a more visually appealing movie (for example, a circus is much more exciting to look at than a swamp), so change your topic sentence to reflect that idea instead of talking about the movie failing to show true love. Also, in the last paragraph, you need to say more about the special effects than the fact that they show the reader's imagination. Be specific about why Burton's old fashioned special effects are better than CGI.&nbsp;