Hey George,<br /><br />It's me again!<br /><br />I had a phone appointment with my advisor to go over my personal statement two days ago, and he did not like it at all.<br /><br />He believes that my writing was too "listy". He thinks that I explained well why I pursue a career in medicine, but does not show who I am as a person.<br /><br />So, I wrote another one. I think this one is more emotional and less&nbsp;of&nbsp;experiences being explained.&nbsp;<br /><br />I will have a list of extracurricular activities as a section of my application, so I tried to talk more about my personality and experiences before college.&nbsp;<br /><br />Please feel free to be critical of the content. Also, please fix any grammatical errors. <br /><br />The word limit is 830. It will be nice if you can trim it down just a bit to 800.&nbsp;<br /><br />Thank you!<br /><br />Best,<br /><br />Viv