Hello GrammarGoddess,<br /><br />Thank you for your detailed comments and awesome editing. I totally agree your points that I need to make reference to Johns Hopkins program throughout the whole paper. After reviewing the document carefully, I have some questions about your comments:<br /><br />1) For comment 7 that you suggested me to link my conclusion to Ling Chen's research, I certainly believe that showing the linkage is necessary. Then do you think if it would be okay for moving explanation about Ling Chen's work and research interest up to that paragraph (second paragraph)? Or would you suggest to leave the description in the last paragraph and add brief sentence at the end of the 2nd paragraph? I'm quite worried since there is word limit for the statement of purpose.&nbsp;<br /><br />For example, at the end of the 2nd paragraph, I might put "This result of my research goes along with the publications and research interests of Ling Chen, who is one of the highly-acclaimed faculties at the Johns Hopkins School of Interantioanl Advanced Studies. In particular, Professor Chen&rsquo;s review about &ldquo;Preferences, Institutions and Politics: Re-Interrogating the Theoretical Lessons of Developmental Economies&rdquo; emphasized the successful developmental stages can be achieved through the interaction of institutions and politics, with a joint contribution of political and economic actors." <br />Then, I might delete some parts in the last paragraph and add some points, like, "As mentioned earlier,I firmly believe that Professor Chen's reexaminiation of political and institutional facotrs in judging the ~~~~&nbsp;I look forward to my future achievements with the master&rsquo;s program at Johns Hopkins SAIS."&nbsp;<br /><br />Does this make sense?&nbsp;<br /><br />2) For the comment 14 (comment at the end of the paragraph 5), would it be okay for me to change the highlighted phrase&nbsp;to "accredited researcher in either private think tanks or the multilateral sector by building experiences in&nbsp;Edwin O. Reischauer Center for East Asian Studies at Johns Hopkins SAIS."<br />In this way, would it be okay for me to delete the United Nations Research Institute for Social Development (UNRIS)? Or do you suggest me to keep this? But I'm not sure how I can phrase the sentence with keeping the UNRIS.&nbsp;<br /><br /><br />So these are my additional questions about your comments. Sorry for the long inquires, but I just want to make sure if I'm on the right track.&nbsp;<br />I would deeply appreciate if you could provide your opinion regarding to my questions.&nbsp;<br />Again, thank you for your time and help.&nbsp;<br /><br />Sincerely,<br />Jaeyoung<br /><br /><br /><br />&nbsp;<br /><br /><br />