Hi,&nbsp;Jaeyoung:<br /><br />Well, here it is just in time for 2016.<br /><br />I thought this essay was good before, now I think it's really good. You tied your arguments together nicely.<br /><br />Just a couple of points. I edited the entire document. I hope you don't mind. I just wanted your points to flow smoothly.<br /><br />As a rule, profs don't particularly like academic papers using the first person ( I, me, my). In my day, we were told to use 'we' but that's daft. So where I could, I just changed the first person to "This paper examines ... etc). I think it sounds better.<br /><br />I was even cheeky enough to change your title, not because it needs changing. I just thought you might like an alternative. Back in the 70s, I spent a whole day thinking about the title alone, which the instructor spend three seconds reading. I've never lost the habit.<br /><br />So that's it. I've read and re-read your paper ten times, or more, so I think I've caught any errors. If not, I'm sure you'll find them.<br /><br />Please don't share the document without running Document Inspector. The edited version always looks so messy.<br /><br />Meanwhile, good luck with grad school.I wish you every success in 2016.<br /><br />If I can be of further help, just send a message to me via Editor World, anytime.<br /><br /><br />BFN - George<br /><br />Be careful with the champagne!&nbsp;<br /><br /><br />