Hi:<br /><br /><br />I have uploaded your edited document and hope that you find the suggestions helpful. If you have any questions, please send a message to me via Editor World.<br /><br />Where I made edits, I tried to keep your voice -- that was paramount. I wanted to keep the essay as it was. However, I made more changes than were strictly necessary, but you can easily accept or reject them using track changes. I agree with your instructor. You did an excellent job. You just needed to flesh out your answers here and there&nbsp;<br /><br />MS Word includes tracked changes by default. Before sharing this document, please consider running Document Inspector. To do this, click File/Info/Check For Issues/Inspect Document on the Microsoft Word menu bar.<br /><br />When you open a document that contains tracked changes, the document appears in the Final Showing Markup view to show that the document contains tracked changes. To review the edited document without showing tracked changes, click Review on the Microsoft Word menu bar. Then select Final: Show Markup and click the drop-down arrow. Choose Final. To show tracked changes again, click Final: Show Markup.<br /><br />Best wishes - TypeRighter (otherwise known as George)<br />I am usually available for editing between 6:00 am and 10:30 pm. If my status is set to unavailable, you can still send a message to me via Editor World.