Hi, Di:<br /><br />You've written a very nice&nbsp;proposal. It's clear, to the point, and sufficiently academic without being weighed down by jargon. I know how it feels to&nbsp;be too close to something. You start wondering if it's clear at all.<br /><br />As for a hook, all you need is a snappy title. The&nbsp;best I can think of is, "Practicing&nbsp;Buddhism in the US and China." But&nbsp;I'm sure you can do better.<br /><br />If you have any questions or I can be of further service, please send a message to me via Editor World and I'll get back to you as soon as I can.<br /><br />Best wishes - George