Hi, PaulBeat:<br /><br />I have uploaded your edited document, and I hope that you find the suggestions helpful. If you have any questions, please send a message to me via Editor World.<br /><br />You did a fine job on your personal essay! I simply fussed and finessed. I cut two sentences that I thought were a bit squishy, but you can easily&nbsp;re-insert them using track changes.<br /><br />Good luck with your application. If I&nbsp;can help in any way, please let me know.<br /><br />Best wishes - George (TypeRighter)<br />I am usually available for editing between 6:00 am and 10:30 pm (EST). If my status is set to 'unavailable', you can still reach me via Editor World.<br /><br />