This is my English Homework essay at &nbsp;college.<br />I got 90/100 on this task and I need to revise to get a better grade.<br />I attatched the professor's comment in the file.&nbsp;<br />I was just wondering if you could revise this essay based on the professor's comment and make a better quality of essay.&nbsp;<br /><br />I appreciate your help.&nbsp;<br /><br /><br />