I fixed the errors that I could. You have a lot of instances of including direct quotations without including the page number. I think that I marked all of them with a comment, but I could have missed one, so look out for that.<br /><br />Also, you repeat whole sections a couple of times. Some of them are between the two chapters, so I don't think it's *as* big of a deal, but if you could find a way to say the same things in a slightly different way, I think that it would be better. I changed some of the wording, deleted and rearranged a few of the repetitions that were in close proximity, but the other chunks are marked with comments.<br /><br />Please let me know if you have any questions or want me to look back over something. I will get back to you as soon as I can, but it might be slightly delayed as I am involved in family things for the next few days.<br /><br />Thank you!