Hi there,<br />Thanks so much for choosing me to be your editor. I appreciate it!<br /><br />Your story is very well-written, intelligently composed, and interesting.<br /><br />My edits were generally for consistency in tone, tense, and parallel structure, along with some grammatical issues, and edits for more user-friendly reading.&nbsp;<br /><br />One typical rule in professional or collegiate writing is not to use contractions, and you have a number of them in your paper (don't, I'm, we've, etc.). I didn't want to make that change in case that's something your professor doesn't mind, but it might be something to consider.<br /><br />Thanks again, and please keep me in mind for any future editing needs.<br /><br />Ryan<br /><br />P.S. Your last line is adorably awesome.