{"coupon":"","discount":"","doc_name":"Prospectus revised","doc_id":68885,"editorId":"2750","email":"peternennig@gmail.com","message":"This is my MA thesis prospectus (you've edited some of my documents on this subject before, i.e. Hegel on language and thought, but this prospectus should be self-contained). The goal is to provide a project description to be approved by my thesis committee. I've done a couple drafts already and here are some comments my professor wants me to focus on in this draft:<br \/><br \/>\r\n<p>\"<em>I&rsquo;d like you to try more seriously to cut the general-level stuff out of your prospectus, and focus on the narrow issue you might actually reasonably be able to tackle in an MA thesis. (Winfield and others are in this respect not great models for how to approach the task of writing a thesis; they let themselves talk too much about larger issues they can really only gesture at.)<\/em><\/p>\r\n<p><em>&nbsp;<\/em><\/p>\r\n<p><em>I&rsquo;d also like you to try to think more reflectively and persistently about whether your sentences are actually saying what you really want to say, and whether the way you are saying things is the most appropriate way to say them clearly &ndash; without, that is, introducing unneeded complexity, difficulty, and side-issues.\"<\/em><\/p>\r\nI've tried to make these corrections but want a second pair of eyes to make sure I've done the best I can.<br \/><br \/>*I've submitted the whole document but would only like you to look at the 750 words under the heading <strong>B. Project Description<\/strong> *","price_select":"8","temp_doc_name":"upload_57b32ac996c510.23056320.docx","word_count":"750","subtotal":32.25,"total_amt":32.25,"firstName":"Peter","lastName":"Nennig","lastfour":"8547","exp":"0819","address":"774 Springdale RD NE","city":"Atlanta","zip":"30306","state":"GEORGIA","country":"United States","transactionReference":"20132098228"}